A few things...
... interesting style, pretty impressed at some points. Others were rather sketchy and mundane.
The one thing bothered me is the lack of a story (and, this being "story mode," is problematic); the guy should actually say something, rather than having his mouth flap flap with no words. Also, it seems more like a psychotic montage than a plot throughout the piece.
argh.
Well done...
... I saw this thinking it would be a joke, but I was actually quite impressed. Well-designed, very professional... nice job.
I wouldn't call it professional, but thank you. It didn't take me that long to make.
Yeah!
Great spin-off reminiscent of the Mystery Science Theatre!
spin off?
Eh...
... your proportions are getting better, but what the heck was that? It was almost set up as a trailer, but too long... I don't know what you were going for, but you didn't get it; this seemed like a summary of everything you've already done, something that could have been said in a paragraph, not requiring an entire animation.
And the sound was hollow and distant... it was like the guy was talking to a wall.
Don't get me wrong, you have potential, but, man... if you're going to spend time on something, make it count.
um, okay
Very nice.
I love the style of this animation. I think what makes it successful is not necessarily the element of surprise... it's the casual attitude the guy has the whole while, and how he is so calm and collected about the ordeal.
If you want to run with this series, I say go for that; place him in rather chaotic or normally highly emotional situations (where one would not keep a cool head), and have him just go about his business of kicking butt and taking names as if it's an everyday ordeal.
For example, I remember the Warner Brothers and Hanna Barbara cartoons back in the day, when they'd have the little duckling/puppy/baby/etc. in a busy construction yard, or a dangerous highway scene... and they would act like everything was perfectly normal.
That, in my opinion, as how to approach this, if you were to make it a series. Nice job.
cheers mate, good solid points.
Uggh
I like these cartoons, but I think this is a cheap way to get hits to your site. Did this take, what, maybe six hours?
I'm kind of disappointed... good style and all, but I've seen teasers longer than this, with a lot more effort put into them.
I like how you equate 6 hours with cheap. my guess is you don't get paid much for an hours work. But I digress. Given your profile and your portfolio, I can't say I'm upset or surprised by your review.
But thanks anyway.
I reallly enjoyed this...
... as your first reviewer put, though, the music was too much, with the stopping. I turned my speakers off halfway through, it was so disorienting.
I think if you wanted more impact, make this a narrative, instead of stopping every five seconds to display a piece of text.
The storyline was amazing, though, and I can't wait for part four. Well-done.
Worry not
the audio problem is fixed
Fairly boring...
... I grew up in the 80's, and, while I'm not blamming this, it didn't make sense. The idea was unoriginal, you didn't really DO anything but post stolen stuff, and the movie never WENT anywhere. But you get a 2 for trying.
stolen stuff? you are tripping! I created this movie from scratch! I wrote the dialog, spent many hours capturing screen shots, cropping, cleaning, and importing. Are you a crack baby or what?
'eavy.
This has potential to be something cool. A few helpful criticisms...
-lighting: dynamic lighting would greatly help with the style of the characters, bringing them out more from the table
-scenery: if you don't have any, it's easy to make, just take some rocks and twigs, at the very least...
Nice first effort, though. I remember my beginning experiments with claymation six years ago, stuff takes forever to set up.
Yeah, my next one is going to be a helluva lot better. This one was spontaneous with only 1-2 hours work. The next one is going to be planned.
Pros and cons...
...while I think you have a nice style, it was kind of jarbled. I know your intentions, but I don't think you pulled it off well. The main problem I have is that there is no closure; you have this girl crying, yada yada, and there's blood everywhere, but there is no definitive point. Did she witness a murder? Did she kill someone? Et cetera... whenever one tries to do a psychological piece, it's always nice to let the audience know why, adds to the intensity. Other than that, it was nicely done.
p.s. You shouldn't be a dick to Tijo221 just because he expressed his opinion. Not everyone who watches your stuff is going to be a fan; you have to take the good with the bad.
first of all, i was joking in my response to tijo, although an unintelligent review deserves an unintelligent response. your comment has a point, and i understand what you're saying about closure. it was however an experimental peice, and wasn't meant to have any story or definite point, only to convey some emotion and practice flash. doesn't make it any better in that respect, but it is what it is.
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